• Liz
    link
    fedilink
    English
    arrow-up
    14
    arrow-down
    1
    ·
    edit-2
    8 months ago

    Your first paragraph is a bit confusing. It’s technically a fragment (replacing “while” with “meanwhile” would fix this), there’s too many implied words, and the ordering of ideas is a bit jarring. As a result, it took me a few tries to figure out you were referencing your own behavior with the second sentence. I’m saying all this because I think it’s the reason people down voted your comment.

    Try this:

    While Meanwhile, I just occasionally remind them that I exist from time to time [ ] until I’m too lazy, by sending links to some articles or something via DMs once in a every few weeks or so until I’m too lazy. This is a bit similar to stalking, so don’t do that.

    Without editing markup:

    Meanwhile, I just occasionally remind them that I exist by sending links to some articles or something once every few weeks or so until I’m too lazy. This is a bit similar to stalking, so don’t do that.

    I hope this wasn’t too annoying, but difficult writing can turn allies into frustrated enemies. I can go into detail about each change, if you want.

    • rottingleaf@lemmy.zip
      link
      fedilink
      arrow-up
      6
      ·
      8 months ago

      Thx, it’s not annoying, my writing is sometimes like this even in my first language.

      I can go into detail about each change, if you want.

      We-ell, my sister regularly does that on every kind of mistake highlighted, so - not necessary, but thanks again, ha-ha.

      • Liz
        link
        fedilink
        English
        arrow-up
        4
        ·
        8 months ago

        Hah, no worries! I didn’t wanna be mean about it, but it seemed like that’s why you were getting flack.